Friday, August 29, 2008

Haiku Friday 8/29/08 - Part Five

Haiku Friday
俳句の金曜日

Previous Installments:
Prologue-Boo!, Part One-Leaving, Part Two-"Adults", Part Three-"Freedom",
Part Four-"Epiphany"
Writing About Writing This

Audacity

Post-epiphany,
I told him I had to go.
No more runaway.

He was not real thrilled.
He'd brought me there, you know?
A way to keep me.

I would need some help.
It's not like he'd drive me home.
(Just take me from it.)

One of those "adults"
who hadn't done anything
had been his mother.

She knew I was there.
We'd even stayed there one night.
But she'd lied "for me."

My parents had called
worried, anguished, scared to death.
And She? Lied. To. Them. (!!)

She hadn't seen us,
had no idea where we were,
her deceitful words.

This while my parents
wondered, worried, drove and search'd.
(Mom, Dad, I'm sorry.)

He must have snowed her,
snowed her so incredibly,
the audacity!

Still, she did help me.
She bought me a bus ticket.
Half of my battle.

Mysteriously,
his brother flipped the hell out.
I mean really flipp'd...

...He started ranting,
speaking crazy, throwing stuff,
begging me to stay.

It was all scary,
bet he'd put him up to it,
one last ditch effort.

Crazy backfired,
bolstered my new determined.
I was out of there.

(to be continued)

28 comments:

  1. smart girl. it's nice to be able to look back and see where you came to your senses!

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  2. The best kind of hindsight is the kind were you made the right decision...even if it took some extra time.

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  3. You have such a way with words, especially considering the subject matter. I don't know many people who could be so eloquent about what you experienced. Keep up the amazing work!

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  4. wow what a story - told through haiku
    very cool to look back

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  5. me thinks that was a wise decision.

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  6. Wow. It's so hard when you have to make a decision that you know others will fight you on.

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  7. Wow! Wowowowowow!

    I just love how you are doing this.

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  8. I wonder how come I was never able to get a girl to run away with me? Oh, wait, I did. Sort of. We've been married 31 years.

    I am lovin' this 'ku to death, darlin'.

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  9. We all come to our senses at some point eh?!

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  10. Amazing what seems like a good idea when we are kids. His mom sounds like a peach!

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  11. I really like this... glad you got a little help.

    It's hard as a parent to imagine not knowing about a child!!

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  12. Wow--that guy really put you through hell! You're really strong.

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  13. We all do the best we can with what we have at the time...'ku can be great therapy!

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  14. Wow... your parents... how heartbreaking!

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  15. I love how you are sharing this story through the 'ku and letting it out.

    Mine is up:
    http://mamabearwrites.blogspot.com/2008/08/haiku-friday-searching-within.html

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  16. with a mother like that, no wonder the son had issues!!!

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  17. Wow, is this some entertainment! Isn't it great how real life can be so much more exciting (or terrifying) than any fiction? Again, glad to know that there is a happy ending out there - compelling stuff...

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  18. I’m riveted with your Haiku … amazing experience and life lessons … eloquently shared.
    Hugs and blessings,

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  19. I've really enjoyed your story and I love how you've put it all in Haiku form. So glad you decided to share it.

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  20. wow! that's amazing!! thank god you left!! thank god! man, what great storytelling. i could almost see the fighting/yelling as it happened (in my mind!)

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  21. I am so glad you are on the other side. What a strong person you are. Good for you.

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  22. Whoa! You've gripped my attention with so few words. I can't imagine how scared I would be, especially after him flipping out.

    The weeks between installments is becoming brutal :)

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  23. Maggie, Your Haiku's always move me so. I can't imagine the uncertainty you felt. I'm glad someone there at least had the decency to buy you a bus ticket.

    Thank you so much for your visit and kind words.

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  24. Wow... kudos to you, and your strength...

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  25. You go girl! Get the heck out of there! I can't wait to hear more!

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  26. The one, last-ditch effort probably had the exact opposite effect, right?

    Can't wait till the end.

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